Hilary ( not sure if this is what was required …….)
Friday afternoon. 3pm. Time to pick up the girls from school.
The cake was a departure from their usual birthday treat. Being a devoutly religious family of modest means, they were not used to celebrations of this kind and usually celebrated birthdays by visiting a place of local interest. This was followed by a family visit to the in laws where their Grandfather would sit the girls down and talk about the family history. Shari had noticed how the two girls would show interest in their grandfather’s talks and was proud of the respect they gave him. However, once removed from his presence, Fabia and her sister would quickly start to discuss their plans for the next day. Shari would try to ensure that they did not lose sight of their past by asking the girls questions about what their grandfather had told them, but the moment was forgotten by the two of them in the excitement of planning their weekend with their school friends.
“ Hi Ma” said Fabia as she bounced down the path from the school. “ Had a good day today, I came first in the spelling test and fourth in the maths test.”
“ Hey, sweetheart, that’s great. Dad will be so proud of you” smiled Shari. She walked slowly with her youngest daughter to the bus stop where she waited for the school bus to bring her other daughter from the secondary school three miles away. “ What do you think Janna will say when she hears about your great school results?”
“ Oh, she will probably say that she did much better when she was ten and that Daddy was even more proud of her than he will be of me” Fabia looked down at her feet and a little sigh emanated from her. Shari knew just how she felt. She was the youngest of four, and always felt that her efforts were less appreciated than those of her three brothers. She often felt quite invisible as a child and this carried through to her teenage years. Until she met the wonderful man who finally became her husband, she had never felt as if she belonged anywhere.
The whole family sat around the table as Shari bore in the chocolate cake which was decorated with sparklers. The lights had been turned off and Shari looked at the girls faces, expectant, excited, lit only by the glow from the sparklers. It was magic and she stifled a little sob that caught in her throat. She would remember this moment.
The following morning was Saturday. The girls had been invited to their Grandparents and Shari ’s husband had taken them early before he set off for work. The taxi firm had asked him to do a further shift.
She thought of the friends of her and her husband. These were the people who had kept her sane. The evenings they had sat and talked about their troubles and those of the wider community. She had basked in the love that they had showered upon her and her husband. And finally, the debt she had realised that she owed them was ready to be paid.
As she walked into the crowded waiting area, she looked up at the ceiling, whispered “Allahu akbar” then louder “Allahu akbar” before smiling and pulling the cord.
I really managed to connect with this piece, I loved the way you managed to turn the villain into the hero. Thoroughly enjoyed reading this, Thank you
ReplyDeleteOH God, I didnt see that coming.
ReplyDeleteI liked the mood and atmosphere and felt the closeness of Shari to the girls. Enjoyed the development but completely taken aback by the final scene. PETER
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