Tuesday, 12 April 2011

Sun Similes: Sue

 Like a big fat leech, the sun sucked and sapped the lifeblood from the fragile crops.

The frustrated sun glared fiercely from behind the thick clouds, as thwarted and angry as a waning dictator unable to sustain the supremacy he had recently taken for granted.

The sun softly spread its gentle warmth across the land, like a child’s blanket.

The sun stamped its mark on the humans like a branding iron, leaving raw, red patterns on flesh that had been exposed to its heat.

Like a magnificent soufflé, the sun rose majestically, peaking at noon. It then softly and slowly deflated, sinking back from its heights, to below the rim of the horizon.

4 comments:

  1. That's exactly what happens to my souffles too Sue! How did you get the accent on the e?
    I really liked the comparison with the child's blanket. It made me feel very warm inside.
    Lovely

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  2. Some very anti-sun stuff here - I enjoyed it. To imagine the sun sapping and sucking rather than giving and pouring was a very effective reversal. The second one has a very 'deliberately overdone' comic tone, and works really well. In fact each simile seems to belong to a different novel, which was quite remarkable!

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  3. Thanks for comments. Anti-sun stuff was a deliberate attempt to provide a new perspective.
    ...Gadaffi was an inspiration.. how many people can say that?!

    Re soufflé with accent - I used spell checker in word. (I copy/paste from word to blog posts) Spell-checked this response box and had same options re correcting/adding.

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  4. I liked the similes Sue, especially the way you introduced some wit into them. For me though the one I liked best was the reference to the child's blanket. PETER

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